Part Three, please see my comment before reading.
The demon was beautiful. If Gorss believed in perfection, then he would have probably said that the word was invented after laying eyes on such a being. The demons skin seemed to glow and its features were pleasingly proportioned. But there was something else that made the demon so beautiful that Gorss almost lost himself, staring at its face.
Almost. The demon didnt look much different to the Overlord and its kind, the beasts that had stolen the freedoms of Gorss people, so that they lived in perpetual fear of divine retribution. Gorss, like the others, despised the Overlord and its kind. Their bloody struggle had culminated in the utter destruction of the Beasts brutal tyranny.
Gorss shifted position, and rearranged the assorted layers of clothing that he wore to try and keep himself warm. He coughed; deep retching paroxysms that he thought might tear his lungs from the inside of chest.
He could here Vritt nearby, snorting and snuffling struggling as he was with this worlds atmosphere. After overthrowing the Overlord, Gorss race had left their homeworld, suspecting that if this God had produced more demons, then others might need freeing from tyranny. The planet Gorss had come to was a hell-hole, but unlike their home planet, the demons were very difficult to find. They had spent many of the planets orbital cycles, searching among the violence and terror struck streets of the cities hunting the demons.
Then the small search force, losing hope with finding the demons, like needles in a haystack, had found their prey with an alien. The alien was in no way as beautiful as the demon. It was injured, and the radiant demon had assisted it into a quiet alley among the black streets of this hellish city. From there they had stalked it.
The alien collapsed to the ground; one of its legs was bent at angle that suggested that it was broken. The alien had two legs and two arms; like all other sentient races. The Overlord had preached that God had created them. Gorss wondered at the limits of Gods imagination.
The radiant demon touched the aliens leg, and it seemed to relax as if the pain was removed, it uttered something that was unintelligible to Gorss what passed for the aliens language. The alien seems to lose consciousness, Gorss felt pity for the alien, as he realised that the demon was sucking its life away.
Then the demon moved away, and they struck. The group emerged from their hiding places, revealing their demon-guns and fired.
The demon screamed as it died. It was music to Gorss ears. They stood, looking at the demons body, now bereft of its radiance.
Funny, said Sarll, with curious snort.
Whats that? asked Vritt, intrigued by the translators tone of voice.
When the alien spoke, it said a word that roughly translates as guardian and healer.














Devious Comments
Comments
I rather like this--this whole thing has gotten way more involved and odd than I would have ever thought of, and I love it. And I have to applaud you for how you followed up ~tooblecane because I had no idea how anyone could use that.
I wish you would write more--I miss reading your work. *has been rereading a few things when she has time*
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...all my best words are deserters and do not answer the trumpet call, and the remainder are cripples.
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I've got a few things in the pipeline... mainly an entry into the *ProsePlease contest. I've got a few ideas as well, but I don't know whether they'll come to fruition over Xmas or not.
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I did notice that.
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...all my best words are deserters and do not answer the trumpet call, and the remainder are cripples.
--Nabokov
Comment me on my writing and I'll comment on yours.
I started my entry in a spurt of inspiration. I'm yet to continue though...
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It was funny. It started: "We roasted the dog. It was an accident, really." Unfortunately, like I said, it descended into maddness soon after.
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...all my best words are deserters and do not answer the trumpet call, and the remainder are cripples.
--Nabokov
Comment me on my writing and I'll comment on yours.
I really crapped out on that one. I had no idea where to take what you had done with the first piece. So I did something else.
Although, I'm gonna get a little defensive:
I know it's not the best thing I've done. But, I set down 6 billion years of evolution in a few paragraphs. And it doesn't sound like complete tripe. A little trying too hard to be sagely, perhaps.
Way to do what I couldn't.
I had no idea where to go with that
So, I backed out and did a small Bible book.
And, I never could do aliens. Holy crap. Too much going on. Kudos to you on that.
I could tell that she didn't really like it, because she was talking around feedback. Ah well.
Good job.
~Yedo doesn't seem to be particularly happy with what either of us have done..
It is hard though, and I think it's one of those things that needs practice to make it work really well.
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Probably. It doesn't help that we've never actually met, the lot of us
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